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Weasel words, doubt and sales

December 28th, 2009

Weasel words are mostly used by politicians and journalists. As a result, most of us treat weasel words with the same contempt we normally reserve for politicians.

There are 2 kinds of weasel words…

1. Words carefully designed to mean nothing
2. Words that leave room for doubt

Words carefully designed to mean nothing

An excellent example of the first variety of weasel words was uttered by former US President, Bill Clinton, on a tour of New Zealand in 1999. In one of his many speeches he uttered the immortal phrase…

Example 1:
We are building a bridge to the 21st Century

Let’s take a look at this sentence. A bridge is a physical entity that spans 2 points in space. It makes it possible to get from one point to the other.

How on earth do you build a bridge between 2 points in time?

The sentence in example 1 contains nothing but feel-good nonsense. It sounds good, but is designed merely to have unthinking people overlay their own interpretation and respond in agreement with rapturous applause.

Weasel words of this variety should not be used by people in business.

Your business is more important than anything a politician does. You create wealth and opportunity with your business, and it’s vital you don’t waste your time wallowing in this type of language.

Words that leave room for doubt

The second variety of weasel words are also used by politicians, but the best practitioners are product reviewers. For example…

Example 2:
This could well be the best computer game I’ve ever played

At first glance you might think this is glowing praise. And coming from a journalist, it’s probably as close as he or she will ever get to glowing praise.

The words ‘could well be’ introduce an element of doubt into the sentence. The writer is saying that he or she isn’t prepared to fully endorse the game.

It’s an idiotic thing to say, anyway. Isn’t the reviewer sure? Then why say the sentence in the first place? And please do note the doubts this type of wording raises.

It doesn’t really matter in a computer game review. It does matter when it comes to your advertising.

The following examples demonstrate the difference…

Example 3:
This is the best computer game I’ve ever played

Example 4:
This is the single best computer game I’ve ever played

Examples 3 and 4 show you how to strengthen an endorsement even further by adding a single word (the word single).

It’s vital that you eliminate both kinds of weasel words from your advertising.

Now you’ll look at specific weasel words, and see how to replace them with words that increase the power of your advertising.

Up to

The phrase ‘up to’ occurs a lot in advertising. The following example shows a typical use…

Example 5:
Up to 50% off everything in store this week only

The phrase ‘up to’ has lost its power in advertising through over-use. You and I know that ‘up to 50% off’ includes the entire range of possible discounts from 1—50%!

Most of us will automatically assume that the item we’re likely to be interested in is one of the ones with the smallest discount.

The other problem with the phrase ‘up to,’ is that it describes an abstract concept. It’s left to the reader to apply the unspecific ‘up to 50% off’ to the specific item he or she actually wants.

That’s probably not going to happen. It’s far more powerful to list the items that you’ve discounted.

Make sure you contrast the original price against the discounted price. You inject more power by mentioning the specific amount saved. For example…

Example 6:
Huge savings on these items this week only…

  • 2-person UltraLite tent. Was $195. Now only $125. You save a whopping $70!
  • 4-season UltraLite down sleeping bag. Was $98. Now only $76. You save $22!

Naturally it works best when you list your biggest discount first, and your next biggest last.

Might or could

The word ‘might,’ when used to mean ‘maybe,’ immediately drains a sentence of its power. As shown in these examples…

Example 7:
This experience might change your life

Example 8:
This experience will change your life

Most of us wouldn’t cross the street for something that might change our lives, because we’re too busy to waste time on something that may or may not make a difference.

Why do they buy? (part 2 of 2)

December 7th, 2009

NOTE: This is part 2 of a two-part series. Please read part 1 before starting part 2.

In the first installment, we looked at the number one killer of sales — doubt. In this article, we’ll look at what you need to do to overcome doubt and encourage people to buy.

Desire

There’s only one reason why a person buys a product or service. They want it. This sounds simple enough, but there’s more to it than first meets they eye. The would-be buyer has to want the product more than the money it costs. It’s up to you to bring the prospective buyer around to that conclusion.

Most advertising generates some degree of desire, but not enough to overcome natural human inertia. This article looks at how to generate desire through your advertising, and use it to get people to take the risk involved in making a purchase.

Doubt

In part one, we looked at the way doubt kills sales. Doubt has the ability to overcome desire. It acts as a warning bell, leaving the potential buyer with the feeling that taking no action is less risky than buying your product.

If doubt kills desire, what kills doubt?

Paradoxically, you can counter doubt with desire. Let me explain…

Desire is an emotion, and human beings are emotional creatures. We are driven to act on emotional impulses. The emotions that spur us to act are…

  • Fear
  • Greed
  • Need

Here are some examples of these three emotions to illustrate the point…

A man with a broken leg is in the path of a charging bull. His fear compels him to act in spite of his pain.

A woman with large debts is offered the chance to place her last $500 on a horse paying 100 to 1. She places the bet in the vein hope that a win might solve her financial problems.

A socially immature man joins a club he has little interest in because his need for approval overrides his desire to occupy his time with activities that interest him.

A woman with poor self esteem, and little money, spends $2,500 on a designer dress that she will wear only once. She believes the dress will compensate for her feelings of inadequacy.

A man borrows heavily to buy an expensive sports car. The car is impractical for his needs, but he believes his friends will admire the car, and that this admiration will extend to him.

In each case, a person was driven to act by an underlying emotion.

If you were to ask, these people wouldn’t consider their actions to be irrational. In fact, they’d give you seemingly rational reasons for acting the way they did. From their own point of view, they had a genuine need to take the action they did. In each case, the motivation to act was driven by desire, not need.

Fear of loss

Fear of loss is another powerful motivator. Some say the fear of loss is actually more powerful than the desire for gain.

You can combine desire with the fear of loss to create a powerful sales tool that inspires immediate action from potential clients. We’ll look at how to do that in an online ad later in this article.

When doubt is stopping someone from making that final commitment for something they desire, the fear of losing it is a useful countermeasure.

Greed

Greed is a powerful desire built into all of us. Greed is not so much a sin, as a powerful survival tool in a world where resources are scarce.

Our species has evolved in a world of scarce resources, and we’ve learned to horde things as a result. You can see this even in our body chemistry, which has us overeat when food is abundant so the excess can be stored as fat.

This natural greed extends to all areas of our lives, and can be used as a tool to sell products that promise to multiply any particular thing people might wish to horde.

A more “evolved” form of greed is exclusivity. Any product that generates an aura of exclusivity, instantly becomes more desirable. Modern art is an excellent example of this. Blotches of paint splashed on paper by a five year old, are worthless. Blotches of paint splashed on canvas by an Internationally recognized artist can command a small fortune.

Exclusivity is an extension of the principle of scarcity. As a general rule, an object is seen as more valuable if it’s desired by more than one person, it’s not easily duplicated, and there isn’t enough of them for everybody. How much would you pay for a glass of water right now? How much would you pay if you were lost in the desert, and hadn’t had a drink in 2 days? How much would you pay if two of you were lost in the desert, hadn’t had a drink in 2 days, and there was a single glass of water?

Guilt

Guilt is a by-product of our overdeveloped brains.

Certain types of product lend themselves to guilt, such as charity appeals. Guilt is paired with a need for approval, which is to say the need to feel good about ourselves. There is a certain satisfaction that comes with giving something away, and this may simply be the removal of guilt!

The need for approval runs through all of us, and is almost certainly related to our social evolution as a species. We developed abstract language as a tool to help us survive the predatory activities of creatures far more powerful and better equipped than we are. Our advantage requires that we cooperate, and it’s likely that our need for approval finds its source in this aspect of our species.

This need for approval can be used to generate desire for certain products. Overpriced automobiles, clothing, art, and jewelry spring to mind.

Buyer’s don’t believe they act on emotion

If you’re finding this article to be rather cynical about human beings, it may be due to this next point. People are generally not conscious of the emotions that underpin the actions they take. This applies as much to our buying decisions, as to any other area of human activity.

An excellent example of this can be seen in a colleague of mine, who once swore black and blue that every buying decision he made was based totally on logic, and was the result of painstaking research over several months. He believed that all his buying decisions were entirely rational.

My colleague failed to grasp two points…

  1. The way he went about purchasing is a separate step from taking the decision to purchase
  2. His desire to get the lowest price was still based on an emotional need

Yes, the person I have in mind does not strike you as one given to high emotion. Yet he buys things that he does not need to survive. Why does he do so?

For example, he already had a very expensive SLR camera. He didn’t need a digital camera. It will take around 10 years to recover the cost of not having to develop an entire film just to get the few photos he wants to keep. He’ll almost certainly have upgraded to another digital camera by then! More to the point, why does he want to take and keep photos anyway?

The plain fact is, despite his painstaking research to find the very best camera, and all the haggling to get the lowest possible price, his underlying motivation was emotional. Nobody needs a camera, but plenty of us desire the photos that result. They’re memories of good times, and rekindle the emotions that accompanied those events.

His desire to get the best price is not based on logic either. He enjoys the process of getting the lowest price on Earth for anything he buys. How do I know this? Because every time he buys something new, the first thing he tells me is how much he saved. The next thing he tells me is how he managed to save so much.

The point is, buying decisions are emotional acts. A person buys something to fulfill an emotional need. You will make more sales if you find a way to speak to that need.

Forcing the issue

Generating desire for a product or service isn’t difficult. Desire is easily aroused in people, simply by clearly communicating the manner in which a product or service meets one or more basic human needs.

Unfortunately for us, desire alone isn’t enough! People are reluctant to act. This tendency is seen during the sales process. A person may well make a decision to buy, yet doesn’t actually do so.

For whatever reason, he or she decides to delay the act of purchasing until some later date. All kinds of reasons may be given for the delay, and most will sound totally convincing. None of these reasons matter. The simple fact of the matter is, it’s usually safer to do nothing.

In a sense, your job as a writer of ads, is to make it safer to act now.

This is especially important on the Internet, because you’re relying on words and phrases to secure the sale. And you have little hope of ever seeing that person again if they don’t buy now.

You need to force the issue.

Use scarcity to force the issue

The way to force the issue is to use the law of scarcity. This law speaks to the fear of loss that resides in all of us, and has its basis in a fundamental understanding of economics that we all share.

Most of us know there is a limited amount of any given item, so it’s usually better to grab something while it’s available.

Capitalism has lessened the impact of this truth in all western nations. It’s very unusual for something to be scarce in a free market. Competing businesses will always outperform a monopoly. That’s especially true of a government-run monopoly.

The lack of scarcity that we all enjoy in the western world, has lessened the impact of scarcity as a selling tool. This is especially true for digital products, where the cost of manufacture is zero. Despite this, you can still use scarcity by imposing a time limit on a special offer.

The special offer

A special offer increases the desirability of any item that a person wants to buy. For example, if you’ve already been sold on a particular brand of car, the ability to get it with $3,000 worth of factory options at no extra cost increases the desirability of that particular car.

If you’re interested in several different models, the special offer is likely to affect your buying decision in favor of the car that includes the extras.

Of course, a special offer won’t get a person to act in and of itself. Why should someone act today, when they can still get the special offer tomorrow? Or next week? Or next month?

For a special offer to invoke action, it needs a time a limit.

The time limit

Consider the above special offer. You get your car at the agreed price, and then the dealer includes $3,000 worth of factory options.

This would certainly cause you to think about this model of car. But in an of itself, that’s all it does.

What if the dealer then told you that the special offer expired tomorrow?

This forces you to think a lot more seriously about the car. If you’re going to buy that model…if you’re really serious about it, you’re going to be better off if you act immediately.

If the special offer is desirable, and the time-limit reasonably strict, it’s safer to act now. It’s more risky to delay. The advertiser has successfully reversed the normal circumstances in which a buyer finds him or herself!

The time limit forces a person to make a real decision, rather than a theoretical one. And it helps get the buyer over the hurdle of risk, by rewarding him/her for taking the next step.

When to disclose the special offer

Time limited special offers are an excellent way to get people to act. But they only work if a person has already decided to buy.

You must first sell the person on buying your product or service. A person must first make a theoretical decision to buy. Once a person has decided to buy, in principle, you can then clinch the deal buy making it safer to act immediately.

Recap

Why does a person buy your product? Because they want the benefits that come with owning and using it.

What are the benefits of owning and using your product? If you don’t know, you’d better find out, because you can’t write a powerful sales ad until you know.

By clearly explaining the benefits of that come with using your product, you build desire for it. But desire usually isn’t enough to secure the sale. You’ll get more sales if you use a time-limited special offer, and make it more beneficial to act now.

Why don’t they buy? (part 1 of 2)

December 7th, 2009

What is it that stops people from clicking the ‘buy now’ button, and entering their credit card details in your sales form?

The 6 reasons

There are 6 basic reasons why a person won’t buy a product or service. Each individual may refuse to buy for one or more of the following reasons…

  1. The benefits aren’t clear
  2. They have no need for the product
  3. They can’t afford it
  4. They’re not asked to buy
  5. They don’t believe the product can deliver on the benefits promised in the advertising
  6. They don’t trust seller

Benefits aren’t clear

A benefit is an emotional reward that the owner gets when he or she uses the product. For example, a man who buys a custom-tailored suit enjoys the pleasure that comes from looking as good as he can possibly look.

Most Internet advertising incorrectly focuses on describing the product itself, rather than the benefits of owning and using the product.

This is a mistake, because a person doesn’t set out to buy a collection of components. He or she is interested in what the product will do for them.

Every product has particular features, and they do need to be included in the ad. But a feature should only be included to support the benefit of using the product. It’s a product’s benefits that matter.

No need

Nobody voluntarily buys a product for which he or she has no need. It’s impossible to sell a person anything until he or she has decided they want what the product offers more than the amount of money required to obtain it.

Having said that, it isn’t necessarily true that a person has no need for a product. It may be that the person hasn’t understood what they’ll get if they buy the product. People don’t buy products. They buy the thing that the product promises to deliver.

For example, people don’t buy cars. They buy transportation, and/or status, and/or convenience, and/or thrills.

It’s highly likely that a sales page that doesn’t get many sales isn’t communicating what the product delivers. As a result, potential buyers don’t understand why they might need the product on offer.

Can’t afford it

Sometimes, a person really can’t afford to buy. In this situation, the solution is to find ways to help a buyer fund the purchase.

It’s more likely that the buyer can afford to buy, but has decided it’s not worth more to him or her than the money it costs. In this situation, the advertiser is almost certainly failing to describe the benefits of using the product in a way that excites the potential client.

For example, a Porsche 911 has several benefits. It will get you from point A to point B. It looks fantastic, with sensual lines and has the appearance of moving even when it’s standing still. It’s a very fast car, with superb handling and a solid reputation for bullet-proof construction. It’s also a very expensive automobile, and few people would pay the asking price if the company focused only on the ‘point A to point B’ benefit.

The phrase ‘can’t afford it’ may, or may not be true. If your product is expensive relative to the market, or involves a non-trivial amount of money, you need to focus on the more exciting things your product will do for its owner.

Not asked to buy

It’s such a simple thing, you’d think every advertiser on the planet would ask people to buy. In fact, amateurs seldom ask people to buy.

It’s more likely that an ad will end weakly, with the advertiser taking a ’softly-softly’ approach in case the prospective client feels pressured to buy.

This is a mistake. Anyone who reads your ad through to the end is interested in your product, but hasn’t made a definite decision to buy at this point. Why not? Because most people try to avoid making decisions. Decisions involve commitment. Most people tend to avoid making commitments.

Likewise, most people tend to avoid taking action. When it comes to money, most of us have learned the hard way that it’s usually safer not to buy. Inaction is the natural state of your average human being!

An ordinary person, having read your ad, will not buy if you don’t ask him or her to do so. Advertising that doesn’t force the issue will end in failure. People will simply finish reading the ad and move on.

After asking a person to buy, you must now tell him or her what they need to do to physically make the purchase.

Don’t believe product will deliver benefits

An ad may well disclose all the benefits that come from owning and using a particular product, but if the potential client doesn’t believe the product can do all those things…the sale won’t happen.

Any advertiser that makes claims for a particular product must be able to back those claims up with credible evidence.

What constitutes evidence depends on the target market for a product. For example, an unsophisticated market will be happy to believe testimonial evidence. Such a person may accept that a health-product produced the results claimed for it by users of the product. A more sophisticated audience will understand the weakness inherent in such a claim and demand stronger evidence. A health product may have to show the results of peer-reviewed double-blind scientific testing.

You need to assess the requirements of your particular market, and provide supporting evidence that speaks directly to the expectations and experience of your target audience.

It may also be that the claims being made for a product are perfectly true, but the product is so far ahead of the rest of the market, the claims are totally unbelievable.

If you’re in this situation, you’re going to have work even harder to demonstrate the truth behind your claims.

Don’t trust seller

The 6th reason why people don’t buy is they simply don’t trust the seller. Some markets are less trusting than others, and you need to adapt your approach for the market you’re selling to.

You can increase your trustworthiness in a variety of ways…

  • Build a relationship over time
  • Join an industry body
  • Obtain certification for your product
  • Use a secure server with an up-to-date certificate
  • Use a trusted 3rd party to process credit cards. This gives the client an independent way to get their money back
  • Use a certified delivery service that allows people to track their order
  • Publish client testimonials with contact details (having obtained the necessary permissions)

In my opinion, it’s the first of these that has the most impact. If you can begin the relationship with something that requires a low level of commitment from a future client (i.e. something free), you give him or her the chance to get to know you.

Whatever you do during this process, it should involve enough client contact for the person to get used to dealing with you. He or she should come to trust you enough that you answer the question ‘can I trust you?’ and remove it from his mind.

Then 6 became one

All the reasons why they don’t buy come down to one thing — doubt.

Doubt is the #1 sales killer, because it dampens excitement and enthusiasm. If you can overcome doubt, you make it possible for today’s jaded consumer to get excited about your product.

And once they’re excited, the sale is in the bag.

If you remove doubt that a potential buyer wants your product, you’ve taken a giant step closer to the sale. If you remove doubt about what the person needs to do to place an order, you’re one step closer to the sale.

If you remove doubt that the product can do what you claim it can do, you’re one step closer to the sale. If you remove doubt about the trustworthiness of your business, you’re one step closer to the sale.

If you remove all doubt…you’ll get the sale! But how do you remove all doubt? That’s the subject of part two.

Why Time Matters in Advertising

December 2nd, 2009

The concept of time is very important in advertising. Your ad may be fabulously persuasive, but if it arrives at the wrong time, you still won’t get the sale. In advertising, timing is everything.

Your ad may arrive at the right time, but if the reader finds it slow-going, he or she will give up (or fall asleep) before you get a chance to ask for the sale. In advertising, time matters. And it pays off when you know how to take advantage of this fact.

Urgency

Urgency is important in advertising, because human beings are lazy. The advertiser might want us to “click here now,” but we’d much rather “click here later.”

Of course, your prospects never get around to coming back later. In fact, “later” is always some point in the future. It’s never “later,” because it’s always “now.” In other words, if you can’t persuade a person to click on your ad “now,” what makes you think you’ll be able to persuade them later?

The way to get past this natural human tendency, is to impart a sense of urgency. There are other articles in this Blog that talk about techniques you can use to create urgency (e.g. discount the price, but place a strict time limit on the reduction).

In this article, I’m going to discuss the words and phrases you can use to reinforce these techniques.

Words that impart urgency

The word “urgent” is an example of a word that imparts urgency. It can work especially well as a headline. For example…

Urgent notice! You must see this now…

This striking sentence must be followed up with something that is genuinely urgent. If you followed up the above headline with “Now we sell toasters,” your reader is likely to lose interest.

The above headline is also less suited to the beginning of an ad, that its end. Let’s say you’ve written an ad that makes a good case for buying your product. You’ve got the prospect to the point where they’re ready to buy.

Introducing the above headline at that point will impart a feeling that you’re about to given the reader some bad news. What you must then do, is give the reader some good news. And this news must also justify the “urgency” your headline claims. For example…

Urgent Notice! You Must See This Now…

Right now — today only — you get all five products for only $49. That’s a massive saving of $76! But please hurry, because this offer expires tonight. You must click here and order now.

This paragraph screams urgency, doesn’t it? It offers a tremendous saving as a reward for taken the action the advertiser wants you to take.

Of course, this technique and these words can only work if the reader has already accepted that the products in question are worth $125. The rest of the ad has to work hard at getting the prospect to believe the products are worth $125, and have the reader still want them at this price.

The “urgency” section then provides a large dollop of excitement, along with the threat of lost opportunity, that has a good chance of prodding the buyer into action.

Hurry

The above example used the words “please hurry.” In this context, the writer is literally pleading with the reader. By doing so, the writer implies that he/she has the reader’s best interests at heart.

Other phrases you can use in this context are…

  • You must act now
  • Don’t miss out
  • Rush
  • Strictly limited
  • Today only
  • Offer expires on…

These words are designed to imply scarcity. Either time, the discounted price, or the product itself will not be available for long. These words generate action, but only in people who have already decided to buy the product. Urgency only works with a buyer.

Urgency reinforcement

Words that reinforce urgency in your ad work on a subconscious level. They imply urgency and immediacy, helping you set up for the urgency section where you give the reason for acting immediately. For example…

  • As soon as
  • Just
  • Now
  • Going to versus About to

These words add value to your overall ad by injecting a little extra excitement. They’re also serve to reduce the impact of a delay between placing the order, and receiving the item (if there is one).

As soon as

Use “as soon as” instead of when or once, as demonstrated in this example…

When you get your Pro Marketing Pack…

Once you get your Pro Marketing Pack…

As soon as you get your Pro Marketing Pack…

The first of these sentences implies that some time will pass before the pack arrives. This serves to dampen enthusiasm among impulse buyers, because it removes the essential element of instant gratification.

The second sentence implies even more time will pass, and all but the most keen will find it hard to respond enthusiastically.

The phrase “as soon as” implies a far shorter period of time, perhaps even no time at all. It adds excitement to the sentence, rather than removing it.

Just

Advertisers often use “just” when they mean “only.” Yet this word is best employed with respect to time. For example…

Earn $5,000 in one week

Earn $5,000 in 7 days

Earn $5,000 in just 7 days

Notice how each sentence seems to shorten the length of time it takes to earn the promised $5,000? The fact that each sentence has exactly the same meaning is irrelevant.

Now

The word “now” implies immediately, and injects urgency into an instruction. For example…

Want to get yours? Then click here now!

The word “now” can also be used to imply that something has changed, leading the prospect to deduce even more benefits are available than previously. This is taken for granted by the prospect, even though the advertiser never explicitly says so. For example…

Now you no longer need to wait for your ad displays

Did you need to wait for your ad displays before? Maybe you did, and maybe you didn’t. The inclusion of the word “Now” certainly implies that you did, but something has changed. This creates the feeling that there is new benefit on offer. What’s great about this format, is it’s the reader who comes to that conclusion on his/her own. As a result, he or she will accept it.

Going to versus About to

The phrase “going to,” implies a longer wait than “about to.” For example…

I’m going to explain how to…

I’m about to explain how to…

Notice the difference? The phrase “going to” is less concrete, as if the promised event is too far in the future to be certain.

The phrase “about to,” implies the promised event will happen very soon. It’s far more concrete, which makes it more powerful.

There are countless examples like this, where your choice of words has a dramatic impact on the overall effectiveness of your ad. This example shows you what to look for when you consider which words and phrases to use.

Timing

They say timing is everything, and they’re right. Your ad can be shown to the same person 100 times, and have absolutely no impact. And then, for no apparent reason, the person buys on the 101st showing.

Why? Because the timing was right. The only way to make sure the timing is right for you, is to get your message out there as often as possible.

Uncompromising ads sell more

November 30th, 2009

Want to make more sales from your advertising? Then you’ll want to eliminate conditional words and phrases from your ad.

Take a look at the following sentence…

This offer is strictly limited. We’re going to have to remove the special discount on Friday. To make sure you don’t miss out, please fill out the form and place your order now.

At first glance, there’s nothing wrong with this close. But let’s zoom in a little closer, and find the conditional words and phrases that weaken this call-to-action.

We’re going to…

The phrase “we’re going to,” weakens the urgency of the close by reinforcing the fact that the offer isn’t being removed immediately. Consider this more powerful version…

This offer is strictly limited. The special discount expires on Friday.

This new version removes all doubt. The special discount will go. And notice how, in the original, the special discount will be “removed.” In the new version, it’s going to “expire.”

The original makes it clear the offer is going to be removed by a human agent. In doing so, it implies it may be possible to negotiate an extension to the offer. This leaves the reader an out, removing urgency and draining power from the call-to-action.

The new version doesn’t compromise. It states the offer “will expire,” implying a natural process where negotiation is impossible. It enhances the urgency of the close, increasing the chance of a sale.

Which Friday?

The original call-to-action stated the special discount will end on Friday. But which Friday? An advertiser injects an enormous amount of power into an ad by being specific…

This offer is strictly limited. The special discount expires this Friday.

This second version removes any doubt about which Friday the advertiser is talking about. Imagine how much more powerful the call-to-action becomes, if it’s read late in the week.

Command action

A call-to-action is made more powerful when the advertiser tells the prospect what to do, rather than asks. Here are the last two sentences in the original…

To make sure you don’t miss out, please fill out the form and place your order now.

At first glance, this may seem like a powerful close. In fact, it suffers from a sudden attack of reticence. Why say “To make sure,” when the advertiser can be totally uncompromising?

The word “please” implies the advertiser is asking the prospect to act. Why ask, when the advertiser can tell? At this point in the ad, the advertiser desperately wants the prospect to order. Surely, it makes sense to go ahead and tell the prospect to do so? Here’s a more powerful version that is far less compromising…

Place your order right now. Fill out this form and click the Submit button…

The new version doesn’t bother to talk about missing out on the special discount. It’s implied by the rest of the paragraph, so why bring it up again? Doing so only forces the reader to wade through unnecessary words before the magic point where the advertiser asks for the sale.

The new version gets right to the point. It literally orders the product to buy. And then explains what he or she must do to actually place an order.

Putting it all together

Let’s bring the two parts of the call-to-action together, and see what we have…

This offer is strictly limited. The special discount will expire this Friday. Place your order right now. Fill out this form and click the Submit button…

We’ve removed many unnecessary words, ensuring the prospect can read these sentences fast. That increases the speed at which the reader gets to the point where the advertiser asks for the sale. It also makes the paragraph easier to understand.

The shorter call-to-action imparts a greater sense of urgency in and of itself. This is reinforced by the language we’re using. As a result, the call-to-action is made more demanding, less polite, and is far less compromising.

It doesn’t leave the prospect with an out. It’s clear that if he or she wants the product at the discounted rate, he or she has to act now. In isolation, the above call-to-action may seem terse. There are two reasons for this…

  • You’re a polite person
  • You’re reading it in isolation

The call-to-action will seem less terse, and make more sense, in its proper context. That is, when it completes a properly constructed ad that gets the prospect excited about the product on offer.

Assuming the rest of the ad achieves its goal, even something as terse as our call-to-action will seem perfectly natural to the reader. He or she will want the product, and appreciate being told how to get it as quickly as possible.

Features and benefits in advertising

November 30th, 2009

Every advertiser knows their product comes complete with its own features and benefits. Every advertiser also knows sales are made on benefits, not features.

Ask an advertiser to tell you the difference between a feature and a benefit, and you may well draw a blank.

Is it a feature or a benefit?

Take a quick look at the following list…

  1. 64-bit processor
  2. You get your work done faster
  3. 1 megabyte of RAM
  4. Powerful enough to do everything you’re going to want to do
  5. 24 inch 1900 x 1200 pixel TFT LCD
  6. A big clear screen with plenty of room for your documents

I’m sure you already know the odd-numbered items are features, and the even-numbered items are benefits. It’s pretty obvious when they’re listed this way.

People make their buying decisions at an emotional level, which is why its the benefits offered by your product that ultimately influence the sale. This doesn’t mean features aren’t important too. Features help establish the credibility of your claim, and may also provide the buyer with a rational justification for his/her purchase.

Features and benefits both belong in your ad. The key is knowing when to introduce them, and the best way to use them.

What is a benefit?

A benefit is a desirable outcome that arises through the use or ownership of your product. For example, the benefits of car ownership may include…

  • Prestige
  • Flexibility
  • Save time

You can regard something as a benefit if it clearly describes an improvement in the buyer’s life. It’s not a benefit if the buyer has to translate the meaning of what you say. For example, prestige may be a benefit to a buyer of a luxury car. Plenty of legroom, expensive leather, lots of gadgets and a V12 engine are features that convey prestige.

What is a feature?

A feature is some aspect or component of a product that delivers an outcome. For example, a V12 engine delivers speed.

It’s certainly true that some features are so well understood by the buyer, they’re instantly translated into benefits. Despite this, your ad should still describe the benefit. This ensures the buyer responds on an emotional level. What’s more, the buyer may not be interested in the specific features that deliver the desired benefit.

The buyer’s subconscious will bring your ad to the attention of his/her conscious mind, as soon as it detects the particular benefit that motives him/her. If your target market consists of speed-freaks, you better make it very clear that your product delivers plenty of speed.

Lead with your #1 benefit

Your ad must lead with the product’s #1 benefit. That is, the number one thing your target market most wants to get from a product like yours. And by “lead”, I mean start talking about the benefit in the ad’s headline.

Here are two examples that illustrate the point. Which of these would you put at the top of your ad?

Do this and you’ll earn $25 million

Do this and you’ll never have to work again

It’s a tricky choice to make, isn’t it? After all, $25 million is a lot of money. But that first headline isn’t without its problems…

  • Such a large amount of money may be dismissed as fantasy
  • The reader has to translate the money into an actual benefit
  • The reader may not regard this amount as enough

The first headline asks the reader to think. It forces the prospect to use a technical part of his/her brain, and translate the amount into a clear benefit. The problem with doing that right at the start of an ad is we don’t want the reader to think. We want the reader to start fantasizing. We want him/her getting excited about the benefit our product conveys.

We want the reader to respond on an emotional level.

If the reader is bogged down with facts and figures, he/she isn’t getting excited. Despite the large sum of money being discussed, the ad starts out with the reader in the wrong frame of mind.

Benefits are exciting

The second headline puts the reader in a different frame of mind. Instead of dealing with facts and figures, it talks about the benefit directly. No thinking involved!

This greatly increases the chance the reader will accept the statement at face value. And if that happens, the reader will start day-dreaming about the joys of not having to work. This will motivate the reader to find out what it is he or she has to do. It has the prospect start reading the ad.

Benefits are exciting. The benefit is the thing people who buy the product actually want. For example, a car-buyer doesn’t really want a specific brand of car. The buyer wants whatever he or she thinks that brand signifies. It might be prestige, performance, environmental responsibility, fuel economy, size or safety.

Of course, your ad can’t dwell exclusively in benefits. A product’s features are important too, because they lend credibility to the benefit on offer.

An ad headline should get the prospect interested enough to read the ad. The introduction should build on this interest. Once you’ve secured it, the reader will want to know why your product is able to deliver the promised benefit. And this is the point where you should introduce the product’s features.

Each feature ought to be explained with the benefit (or benefits) in mind. It must be made perfectly clear to the prospect exactly what benefit a particular feature delivers.

Features belong in the middle part of the ad. They’re there to help the reader understand how the product delivers on the claims (benefits) made for it. The ad must then end by talking about benefits.

End with the benefit

The buyer wants the desired outcome (benefit) that comes with owning or using the product. A prospect will buy only if he/she believes the product will deliver those benefits. The middle part of your ad should prove that your product delivers everything you claim for it.

You must then turn your focus back to the product’s benefits. Remember, a person responds to your product on an emotional level. He or she will make a buying decision based on the benefits alone.

Your ad needs to close by restating the benefits, now made credible in the mind of the buyer, and explain exactly what the prospect has to do to get the product. In particular, you should find a way to remind the prospect that the main benefit is available just as soon as he/she places an order.

Instantly make your ad less powerful

November 29th, 2009

The words you use in your ad, and the way you use them, make a big difference to your results. Two sentences may have the exact same meaning, but one is guaranteed to outsell the other.

Is your ad looking a little iffy?

The word “if” has the power to rob a sentence of its persuasive power. It does this when it appears after a beneficial statement. For example…

You will earn $7,500 per week, if you can refer five people!

The sentence leads with a positive, stating a specific amount of money that will be earned. This positive, of interest to any MLMer, is then weakened by the qualifier that follows. It weakens the ad, because the qualifier (a negative) casts doubt on the benefit.

Take a look at the same sentence when we lead with the negative…

If you can refer five people, you will earn $7,500 per week!

This version of the sentence ends with the positive. The reader is left with the thought of earning $7,500 (benefit), instead of having to recruit 5 people (chore).

Remove every last trace

Of course, the sentence can be made more powerful by leaving out the word “if” altogether…

Refer five people, and you will earn $7,500 per week!

Removing the word “if” helps to disguise the qualifier. As soon as “if” appears in a sentence, it automatically implies a qualification. And in the context of advertising, we run the risk of the reader automatically assuming the qualification is there specifically to exclude him or her from the benefit.

Why take the risk that the reader will leap to this conclusion?

Further masking the qualification

Our sentence can be further strengthened by including language that minimizes the qualifier in the mind of the reader. For example…

Only 5 people. That’s all you need to bank $7,500 a week!

This version uses the word “only” to imply a small quantity. To reinforce this effect, I’ve substituted the numeric 5 for the longer (and so larger) word five. I’ve also removed the word “refer,” which implies work. I split the sentence in two as this further separates the work (referring) from the benefit (money). And finally, I’ve replaced the word “earn” with “bank.” The word “earn” implies doing work. The word “bank” implies something far more beneficial and solid.

This two-sentence approach carries a certain reckless disregard for the usual rules of grammar. This may upset one or two people. Ignore them, and instead focus on the impact on the majority of your readers.

You may also notice that I’ve replaced “per week” with “a week”. The meaning is unchanged, but the sentence is easier to read. This gets the reader to the end of the sentence faster, and is generally less demanding on the reader.

It does make a difference

The way you use words and phrases in advertising does matter. The way you construct a sentence, and your use of grammar will help or harm your results.

It pays to study the art of writing advertising copy. You will make more money by learning more about it.

Stay tuned for more in-depth articles like this one right here in The Online Marketing Blog.

When should you disclose the price?

November 28th, 2009

I see a lot of ads in my business. I get to look at dozens of new ads every day, and it’s interesting to note the point at which an advertiser decides to introduce the price.

I’ve seen people disclose the price in the headline of an ad. I’ve seen people disclose the price in the opening paragraph of a sales page. I’ve seen people leave the price until the very last minute, and disclose it just before they ask for the sale.

I guess some advertisers think it doesn’t matter all that much. In fact, the reverse is true.

The point in the ad where you introduce the price is very important. The price can make or break a sale, and it’s essential to introduce it at exactly the right time.

The price is never a benefit

An advertiser that discloses the price at the start of an ad, has killed the sale before it’s even started. A potential client never regards the price as a benefit.

It’s easy for the seller to confuse the price with a benefit, because it is a benefit to him or her! It pays to remember that the reverse is true for the buyer.

Actually, there is one possible exception to this rule. If the product and its regular price are very well known, a massive discount may be viewed as an advantage. The problem is, you can’t be certain that…

  • The prospect knows the product and its regular price. He or she may not understand the significance of the discount
  • The prospect will accept the discount without getting suspicious about the reasons behind it

In my view, it’s far to risky to begin an ad with the price. The odds are overwhelmingly against your prospect seeing the price (or a discount) as anything like a benefit to get excited about.

It’s more likely that revealing the price too early, will kill the sale.

A price without benefits

A price without benefits, is like a pub without beer (i.e. pointless). For that reason, it’s best to leave the price until you’ve first had a chance to introduce your client to the benefits of owning and/or using your product.

The price of something is never good news. It’s a roadblock placed directly in the path of the sale. You must replace the issue of price in the mind of the prospect, with the benefits offered by your product. If the client doesn’t come to believe that the benefits are more valuable to him/her, than the money he/she will have to pay, the sale won’t occur.

That’s why it’s essential that the benefits of owning/using your product are described first.

The price signals reality

As soon as you introduce the price of your product, it brings a potential client back down to earth. It’s the moment of truth. The price forces a potential client to make up his or her mind. To decide whether he or she is truly interested.

You can imagine how disastrous this could be. The last thing you need, is to have your prospect make a buying decision before he/she knows what the benefits of ownership are.

The price forces the prospect to make a decision, and that means there’s only one logical place to put it.

Disclose the price just before you ask for sale

The best place to disclose the price is just before you ask the prospect to buy.

The price brings your prospect back down to reality, and this is reinforced by the request for the sale. It’s the make or break moment, which is why it belongs at the end of your ad.

Assuming the rest of your ad has done its job, only now will the prospect be able to make an informed decision. Specifically, does he/she want the benefits offered by your product more than the money it costs?

How to write a powerful sales ad

November 26th, 2009

To turn any potential client into an actual client, you need to answer the questions your potential clients are asking.

Every potential client goes through a process when thinking about buying something, and must be satisfied that he or she has answered these five questions…

  1. What does this product do?
  2. Do I want the outcome this product delivers?
  3. Do I believe this product will deliver the outcome?
  4. Why should I buy the outcome from this source?
  5. Can I afford it?

Every product has its own specific set of features that need to be described in the ad. There’s a good chance your sale copy answers those questions already. After all, you know your own product better than anyone.

The above five questions aren’t necessarily focused on a product’s features. When I’m asked to look at a sales page and find out why it’s not working, it’s usually down to a failure to answer these questions.

What does the product do?

It’s the most fundamental of questions, and you have to answer it right at the start of your sales copy. It sounds so logical. So simple. Surely every advertiser gets right to the point, don’t they?

Well, no actually. An incredibly large number of advertisers begin their sales copy by naming the product and talking about how good it is. These advertisers make a dangerous assumption that their potential clients already know what their product is, and what it will do for them (meaning the potential client).

Some advertisers even assume naming the product is as good as describing what it does.

It’s easy to forget the reader doesn’t share your intimate knowledge of the product. Consider the following ad headline…

Have it all done for you automatically

Do you see the problem? The advertiser is using the ad headline to describe a major benefit, but fails to provide a context for the reader. What will be done for me automatically?

An amateur might think of this as a curiosity device, hoping people will be desperate to find out more. In reality, we’re all too busy to pursue an ad headline like this.

The writer of this ad either doesn’t know, or has forgotten, what an ad headline is supposed to do. As a result, he or she has killed any chance of getting the sale.

Do I want the outcome this product delivers?

Describing what the product does must be done in conjunction with describing the outcome the product delivers. By that, I mean the benefit that comes with owning or using the product.

Most advertiser’s either describe what the product does, or the outcome it delivers. As you saw in the above example, this doesn’t work. You must describe both.

Once again, it seems self-evident. Of course you should do this! But are you? The following examples show the headlines of two ads. The first is a typical ad headline, while the second describes both the product and it’s benefit in one simple statement…

Flu, colds and other health problems!

You will make money with this advertising!

The first headline is oh-so-close to getting it right, but not close enough to win a cigar. Is the advertiser offering to give you a dose of the flu?

Ending the headline with a question mark would have been better. Starting the headline with “Instant cure for” would have been better still.

Meanwhile, the second headline tells you exactly what’s on offer. It’s advertising, and there’s money to be made. Anybody in the market for advertising knows immediately that they need to find out more.

The ad must now set out to convince the reader that the product can deliver on the promise made.

Do I believe the product will deliver the promised outcome?

Every potential clients wants to believe the promises you make for your product. For example, what advertiser wouldn’t want to make a profit on the money they invest in advertising?

The problem every advertiser faces is the long series of past disappointments experienced by the prospect. Consider the following ad headline…

Discover the sizzling new cash secrets that generate $7,000 a week!

This headline will certainly grab the attention of anyone interested in earning money. Such a person will certainly want to believe it’s true. Now the advertiser has to prove its true.

If this was your ad, what would you say to clinch the deal? It’s a useful exercise to go through, and I encourage you to think it through. What things need to be in a sales page to make a statement like this credible?

Why should I buy the outcome from this source?

You’ve made your prospect an offer he or she can’t refuse. You’ve convinced the potential client that you, or your product, will deliver the promised outcome.

Now the ungrateful sod has the cheek to think about another supplier? Yes, unfortunately.

If you’re the only supplier, that’s great. All you need to do is say so, and the question is answered. If you’re selling something the prospect can get at Walmart, you have a big problem. Here’s why…

Your prospect doesn’t know you, or anything about you. He or she is taking a big risk buying from you. Human nature will drive your prospect to reduce that risk (i.e. look for a trusted source), unless you provide a good reason to buy from you. You need to attack this on two fronts…

  • Provide evidence that you’re a reliable source. Testimonial evidence is a big help here, especially if the testifiers can be contacted
  • Offer benefits available only if the prospect buys from you. Find something other than price, because anyone can offer a discount.

Can I afford it?

Congratulations. Your potential client wants the outcome your product delivers. What’s more, you’ve convinced him or her that you can deliver that outcome. The would-be client has decided to buy. Surely the sale is in the bag, isn’t it?

Not necessarily.

The prospect may decide he or she doesn’t want the desired outcome badly enough to actually fork over cold hard cash. If so, he or she will think “I can’t afford it.”

It’s not that the client doesn’t have the money (unless you sell something very expensive). It’s more about the need to rationalize the purchase. In particular, the prospect must be able to justify the purchase to significant people in his or her life. Such people include…

  • An employer
  • Colleagues
  • A spouse
  • Friends
  • Famolu

You can’t rely on your prospect to do this for him or herself. You must equip your prospect with a rational explanation for the purchase.

You don’t need to do this to convince your prospect to buy. You need to do this to give your prospect the ammunition he or she needs to justify the purchase to others. For example, consider a product that costs $30 per month…

For just $1 a day, you get a guaranteed $600 return per dollar invested. And you get it in just 30 days.

That’s a whopping 24,000% return on your investment per annum! You’ll never make a profit like that from your bank, will you? Especially while your bank is paying a lousy 5–10%.

In this case, the rationalization breaks down the amount paid to its smallest sensible component: $1 a day. And note the word payment is never used. The term investment is used because it implies there is a profit to be made.

What’s more, the desired outcome is described as both a “return on investment”, and a profit. This is just in case the reader doesn’t know what “return on investment” means. And allows the advertiser to reuse the word “investment”, thus extracting twice the benefit.

The reader is then asked to contrast the sheer brilliance of the product on offer, against the “lousy” return those rotten scoundrels at the bank are paying.

How to answer the five questions

It’s important that your ad doesn’t actually ask the five questions. Yes, it must answer them. But it has to do so in a way that gives a potential client the answers he or she needs, within the context of supplying useful information.

If you actually ask these questions in your sales copy, your prospect will not understand why you’re doing so.

The prospect isn’t aware he or she is asking these questions. They occur at a subconscious level. That’s why you need to answer them within the wider context of your sales copy.

How to create web pages that sell

November 26th, 2009

There’s an old adage in direct marketing that goes: The more you tell, the more you sell. It’s every bit as true today as it was back in the 1950s.

Most amateurs think a sales letter, landing page or online sales page ought to be as short as possible. I’ve often had clients tell me there are too many words in an ad, and that people will “never read all that.”

This myth is totally incorrect. People don’t buy because the advertiser is kind enough to leave out a bunch of words. People buy because they’re excited about the product on offer, and the advertiser was thoughtful enough to answer all their questions on the sales page.

The less you tell, the harder it is to buy

Consider this from the perspective of someone looking to buy life insurance on the Internet. What are the questions such a person might ask?

  • Is the product right for me?
  • Is the company credible?
  • Can I afford it?
  • Is it overpriced?

These are the key questions relating to life insurance, in the mind of someone who has already decided to buy.

A web page that aims to sell life insurance must answer every one of these questions. If it doesn’t, the person is unable to buy. He or she is simply left with unanswered questions, and will be forced to leave the sales page to get the answers they need. As soon as that happens, the sale is lost.

So how much should you say?

That’s a good question. I learned everything I know about writing sales copy from a genius, who consistently produced wildly successful ads. He would answer this question with an exasperated grunt and a roll of the eyes…

You say exactly as much as you need to say to get the sale. And no more.

In other words, leave out everything that doesn’t contribute to the sale. Exclude nothing that’s necessary to close the deal. If you can say it all in two sentences, then do so. If you need 100,000 words to get the sale, that’s how many you should write.

It sounds simple, but it takes experience and skill to get it right. All you need to do is try different versions of your sales page, and measure the results. You’ll soon find out which approach works best.

Fast to download

Most people now have a fast Internet connection. We no longer have to wait more than a second to view a web page. Even so, you should make sure your sales page loads as quickly as possible.

Get rid of any graphical elements you don’t need. Keep the design simple, and eliminate other distractions. After all, this is your sales page. It should contain only those elements necessary to get the sale.

Easy to read

Your sales page must be easy to read. The color of the text ought to be radically different to the background color. For example, having light blue text on a slightly darker blue background is insane.

The body copy fonts should be reasonably large, but not too large. You’re looking for something that is both easy on the eye, and easy to read.

You can enhance readability by limiting the width of the page. I like to keep the width of the actual text down to around 500 pixels. Any more than that, and the eye has to scan too far to find the beginning of the next line.

The basic rules of page design apply to web page design. Include plenty of “white” space, guidelines to help the reader’s eye, and ways to keep people reading.

Don’t split the page

With direct mail, you’re often forced to continue a sales message over multiple pages. You don’t have to do this on the web. So don’t.

The problem with spreading copy over multiple pages is that people often stop reading at the end of a page. Your goal is to keep people reading all the way to the end. On the web, the best way to achieve this is to keep everything on a single page.

NOTE: There are special instances where you do want people to click through to the next page. These are more likely to occur in lead generation rather than sales copy.

Pack a punch

Most products and services don’t require that you adopt a sophisticated tone. Taking on “airs and graces” will kill the sale stone cold dead.

If you’re selling something that regular people are going to buy, your sales copy needs to pack a punch. You should use short, power-packed words that excite the reader.

As a general rule of thumb, the old-English (often with a Saxon root) version of a word is the better one to choose. It will tend to be short, and guttural in sound. In almost every case, it’s more powerful to use short punchy words than longer soft-sounding (often with a Norman root) words.

Treat sentences like words

Your sentences, like your words, will sell more when they’re short and punchy. One trick I use to keep sentences short, and easy to understand, is to limit a sentence to a single point. For example…

The new 64-bit processor is faster, and more powerful than the old 32-bit processor, yet costs the same, giving you the power to do more without spending more!

This sentence is unnecessarily complicated, because it attempts to cram two separate points into a single sentence. This makes the sentence harder to understand, and the benefits are lost as a result.

The two points are more powerfully expressed in this two-sentence version…

You get more done in less time with the powerful new 64-bit processor. And best of all, you get it for the same price as an old-fashioned 32-bit processor!

Splitting the sentence in two makes it possible to inject extra power (e.g. the words powerful, old fashioned) into the point being made. The author is able to focus on each point individually, and so has the ability to highlight the benefit. At the same time, the paragraph is simplified and easier to understand.

Tell the client to buy

Are you a polite person? If so, you’re at a disadvantage when it comes to writing copy for the closing part of a sales page. Impolite, but highly successful advertisers, do not ask the client to buy.

They tell them!

And when I say tell, I mean they assume the sale and tell the client what to do to place an order. Here are two different ways to ask for the sale…

If you’d like to order, please click here.

Click here now!

The first example is very polite, but it’s also weak. The second example might seem abrupt, but it’s much more likely to result in a sale.

We’re talking about the end of the sales message here. At this point, everyone who isn’t interested has already stopped reading. The people who are still reading are very interested in your offer.

They’re also human beings. They spend their whole lives avoiding action. The last thing they want to have to do is make a decision.

The very last thing you want to do is leave the decision in the hands of your potential clients. It’s far more effective to avoid the decision altogether, and tell the client what he or she needs to do to place an order.

Don’t ask — tell. Assume the sale, and it’s usually yours.

Please note that I’m talking about the end of the sales page here. Don’t use this technique at the start of the sales page. If you start your ad with a headline that says “Read this now,” you’ll lose most of your potential clients right there.

The forcefulness I’m talking about is only appropriate at the end of a sales page.

And even at this point, you’re not really being rude. You’re simply assuming the sale and explaining what’s required to make the purchase. In context, it’s not being rude. It’s being wise.

Summary

Your sales page can only be successful if you give your prospects all the information they need to buy. Don’t leave any important question unanswered.

Your sales page needs to load quickly, and contain short exciting words that pack a punch. Keep everything on one page, and remember to tell the prospect exactly what he or she needs to do to buy.